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Eating too much sugar is harmful for health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption while others think that it is individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views

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Nowadays, containing a lot of
sugar
 in foods makes
people
 unhealthy. According to
this
, some
people
 say that the problem belongs to the government, while others believe that it is a personal issue. In
this
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 I will be exploring both views.
Firstly
,
people
who
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mention that the government should take responsibility
restrict
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 the amount of
sugar
 by enforcing the law. On
food
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 the main problem is the advancement of
technology
.
This
 is because the proceeds of transportation made it faster to reach the
sugar
 from farm to facility. Due to
this
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 the price of
sugar
 is declining and it is easier to use a number of
sugar
.
Secondly
,
sugar
 has
the
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nature not to rot the products so that companies tend to use it.
However
, in view of too much
sugar
 being a personal problem, it depends on your own decision. The reason is that if you buy products at a supermarket, it shows the details.
Furthermore
,
advancement
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of
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technology
 made
high quality
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 products that do not contain
sugar
 much.
Besides
,
people
 argue that there is another issue
which
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in which
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people
 are not much more active than before. Associated with
this
, there are the citizens that the amount of
sugar
 is the same but their bodies are healthy. In conclusion, too much
sugar
 is one of the main problems these days. There are
people
 who believe that it is the government 's fault or not. The difficulty is that both ideas involve the advance of
technology
 so that the citizens need to use the
technology
 as a good way and it is possible that
people
 can become healthy one day.
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