Some people think that several short holidays from school are better, while others think one long summer holiday for the year is better for children. Discuss both views and include your own opinion and relevant examples from your experience.

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on the safety of kids during the
extreame
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extreme
weather and focus on
festival
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the festival
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season on local to enjoy them.
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discuss
both
side
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and will provide owe opinion
also
. On the one hand,
most
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importent
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important
thing is short break vacation do better for release stress of
long
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time
studying of
subects
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subjects
in college and it is
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to avoid
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loosing
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losing
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interest of
learnning
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learning
. As in educational process in schools are not friendly for
students
at all the
time
,
such
as more in-class lectures, reading references, lot of
homeworks
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homework
,
assigments
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assignments
etc. after some break
students
could take a
freash
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fresh
start and it more
affective
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for their education
also
.
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thing is
this
short break focus on some festival season in
local
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area it could help to
students
to take complete enjoyment with their families.
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, lot of countries has
extrame
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extreme
weather for some months in every year and those
time
not suitable for
student
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the student
a student
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to
attent
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attend
schools. During the
summer
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summertime
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time
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,time
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kids can stay safe
in
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home
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and spend
time
with their families and relatives.
Also
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most families like to travel on
long
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a long
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vacation with their children and long
time
break is the best option for that. Children have many opportunities to learn many
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through
traveling
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travelling
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and it
help
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to
imporve
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improve
their knowledge.
for example
, pupils could see and learn about cultures, traditions and meet different people from apart of
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the world
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. In conclusion, I
belive
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that both options of short-term and long-
trem
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term
break are suitable and it must
be consider
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with other factors and
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make
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the best option by the
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educational
institute or government.
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