Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

THE UBIQUITY AND WIDESPREAD OF SOCIAL MEDIA USERS ACROSS ALL AGE BRACKETS IS A
PREVELANT
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PREVALENT
TREND IN THE MODERN SOCIETY.
HOWEVER
, CONCOMITANT TO ITS POPULARITY IS THE RISK FOR PERSONAL DATA
THEIVERY
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THIEVERY
AND ENCRYPTION. CONSIDERING THE CRUCIALITY OF THE RISKS INVOLVE, I BELIEVE THAT DESPITE CERTAIN BENEFITS THAT SOCIAL MEDIA PLATFORM PROFERS, IT DISADVANTAGES OUTWEIGHS THE ADVANTAGES. THE BIRTH OF DIGITAL PLATFORMS HAS REVOLUTIONIZED COMMUNICATION SYSTEM MASSIVELY. WITH
THIS
INVENTION, PEOPLE, IRRESPECTIVE OF THEIR GEOGRAPHICAL LOCATION CAN NOW COMMUNICATE
TO
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ONE ANOTHER ON A REAL-TIME BASIS. FACEBOOK MESSENGER OR ZOOM
FOR
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INSTANCE, CAN FACILITATE PERSONAL OR BUSINESS TRANSACTIONS EFFICATIOUSLY WITHOUT THE NEED FOR
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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