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You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course.  Write a letter to the Head of Department to change your course. In your letter, explain:  what course you are doing now  why you are not satisfied with that course  what course you would like to change to  Write at least 150 words.

#course #college #change #head #department
Dear Sir, With due respect my name is Raman. I am studying in
new
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 short-term
course
 at your college. I am writing
this
 letter about I want
change
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this
course
 immediately because my classes are running daily. As I previously mentioned that I want to
change
 that
course
 when I
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admission
admissions
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at
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 that college. I did not know how about
this
course
countinously
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continuously
cautiously
 as well as beneficial for moe.
Moreover
, but yes, my friend is providing relevant knowledge about
this
course
. Unfortunately, my previous study does not
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 to
this
course
. I
thinnk
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think
its
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 just
waste
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a waste
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 of money and
also
 time.
Therefore
, I want to
change
 it. II would highly request you that please give me permission to
change
 the
course
.
Furthermore
, I should choose the
course
according
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 my choice and own my
first
 degree. I want to complete
D
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- Pharmacy at that college. I hope you will understand my situation and agree with me. I am really excited and heard that you will take
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 as soon as possible.
Thankyou
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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