You are not happy with the course you are doing at college and would like to change to a different course.  Write a letter to the Head of Department to change your course. In your letter, explain:  what course you are doing now  why you are not satisfied with that course  what course you would like to change to  Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir, With due respect my name is Raman. I am studying in
new
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short-term
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at your college. I am writing
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this
course
immediately because my classes are running daily. As I previously mentioned that I want to
change
that
course
when I
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at
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that college. I did not know how about
this
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as well as beneficial for moe.
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, but yes, my friend is providing relevant knowledge about
this
course
. Unfortunately, my previous study does not
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to
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just
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of money and
also
time.
Therefore
, I want to
change
it. II would highly request you that please give me permission to
change
the
course
.
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, I should choose the
course
according
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my choice and own my
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degree. I want to complete
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- Pharmacy at that college. I hope you will understand my situation and agree with me. I am really excited and heard that you will take
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as soon as possible.
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