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Rising University fees and limited employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and should only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. (To what extent do you agree or disagree)

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Although
 increasing educational fees and unemployment is a major concern for an enormous number of
students
 and fresh graduates, it does not mean
universities
 should give up on
arts related
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subjects
, as
this
 issue can
be solve
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 by the government and
universities
 together.
Therefore
, I wholeheartedly, disagree with the statement, and
subjects
 like philosophy and
history
 must be
teach
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taught
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 in
universities
.
Now days
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Nowadays
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,
students
 pay hundreds of dollar per semester as
an
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education fees
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education
 fees.
This
have
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leads
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 a substantial number of
students
 to quit or freeze their
education
 in the middle of
course
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the course
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.
In addition
, some
students
 tend to start private and online
education
 at
universities
, so that they can pay what they can afford.
Moreover
,
this
 problem can be solved by the government if they rise the supporting funding or announced scholarships for those who cannot afford higher
education
.
subjects
, particularly, philosophy and
history
 are the roots of Arts. Removing these
subjects
 from the syllabus would even worsen the unemployment situation. Thousands of teachers and
students
 are involving with these
subjects
 and will cause them to become jobless and inefficient.
Furthermore
, those who have
majoring
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 in these
subjects
 can
also
 play a significant role in the country economy and growth. As an example, if there is no
history
 teacher in
universities
, who will teach and how will others know about the particular
history
. In conclusion, no doubt, the rise in the fees of the
universities
 is a major problem but it can be eventually solved by the government by supporting them financially. On other hand,
subjects
 like
history
 and philosophy are the roots of Arts and must be taught.
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