Rising University fees and limited employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and should only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. (To what extent do you agree or disagree)

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Although

increasing educational fees and unemployment is a major concern for an enormous number of

students

and fresh graduates, it does not mean

universities

should give up on

arts related

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subjects

, as

this

issue can

be solve

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be solved

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by the government and

universities

together.

Therefore

, I wholeheartedly, disagree with the statement, and

subjects

like philosophy and

history

must be

teach

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taught

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universities

Now days

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Nowadays

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students

pay hundreds of dollar per semester as

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education fees

an education fee

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education

fees.

This

have

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has

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leads

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led

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a substantial number of

students

to quit or freeze their

education

in the middle of

course

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the course

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In addition

, some

students

tend to start private and online

education

universities

, so that they can pay what they can afford.

Moreover

this

problem can be solved by the government if they rise the supporting funding or announced scholarships for those who cannot afford higher

education

subjects

, particularly, philosophy and

history

are the roots of Arts. Removing these

subjects

from the syllabus would even worsen the unemployment situation. Thousands of teachers and

students

are involving with these

subjects

and will cause them to become jobless and inefficient.

Furthermore

, those who have

majoring

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in these

subjects

can

also

play a significant role in the country economy and growth. As an example, if there is no

history

teacher in

universities

, who will teach and how will others know about the particular

history

. In conclusion, no doubt, the rise in the fees of the

universities

is a major problem but it can be eventually solved by the government by supporting them financially. On other hand,

subjects

history

and philosophy are the roots of Arts and must be taught.

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