Rising University fees and limited employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and should only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. (To what extent do you agree or disagree)

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increasing educational fees and unemployment is a major concern for an enormous number of
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and fresh graduates, it does not mean
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should give up on
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, as
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issue can
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by the government and
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together.
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, I wholeheartedly, disagree with the statement, and
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like philosophy and
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must be
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in
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.
Now days
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,
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pay hundreds of dollar per semester as
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education fees
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fees.
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leads
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a substantial number of
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to quit or freeze their
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in the middle of
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.
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, some
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tend to start private and online
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at
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, so that they can pay what they can afford.
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,
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problem can be solved by the government if they rise the supporting funding or announced scholarships for those who cannot afford higher
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.
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, particularly, philosophy and
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are the roots of Arts. Removing these
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from the syllabus would even worsen the unemployment situation. Thousands of teachers and
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are involving with these
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and will cause them to become jobless and inefficient.
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, those who have
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in these
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can
also
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play a significant role in the country economy and growth. As an example, if there is no
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teacher in
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, who will teach and how will others know about the particular
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. In conclusion, no doubt, the rise in the fees of the
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is a major problem but it can be eventually solved by the government by supporting them financially. On other hand,
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like
history
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and philosophy are the roots of Arts and must be taught.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural literacy
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual growth
  • preservation of culture
  • problem-solving skills
  • ethical reasoning
  • market unpredictability
  • innovation
  • holistic education
  • globalized world
  • historical contexts
  • multicultural environments
  • public service
  • media and arts management
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