Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences.

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The tourism industry is growing very fast nowadays. A various number of
people
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often travel on different occasions, for holidays or for work. Certain
people
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suggest, that whoever visits another
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, should adopt local traditions and behaviour. Others oppose
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recommendation, thinking that
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in the host
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should welcome and accept visitors from different cultures with open arms.
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, it is definitely a sign of respect when foreign
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follow the local customs and
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behaviour in
behavior in
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they are visiting.
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,
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is a way to connect with the locals.
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, if a Spanish person travels to Germany, knowing the language will help him socialise.
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,
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is a good opportunity to try new thing
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as traditional food.
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, if someone goes to Italy, they have to eat pasta or pizza there.
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, local customs and behaviour are
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sometimes
linked to religion, which is why I think, every traveller should be well acquainted with all traditions before getting ot the plane.
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, I
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support the other side of the debate. I believe that
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in every
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should accept cultural diversity, which does not mean, that local traditions should be ignored. Welcoming cultural differences
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a
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hospitable and
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a desirable tourist destination.
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, if the host
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does not tolerate
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from other lands, it would be a disaster for local tourism, because most of the tourists would not want to go back to the land, where they were
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discriminated
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against.
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In conclusion, I believe that both proposals are beneficial not only for the
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in the host
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,
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but
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abroad. Discrimination should not exist and every
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should accept different cultures, as well as every
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should follow local customs and behaviour as much as possible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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