The graphs below show the cinema attendance in Australia and the average cinema visits by different age groups from 1996 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the cinema attendance in Australia and the average cinema visits by different age groups from 1996 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and line chart give information regarding the
number
of
people
who paid a visit to
movie
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the movie
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theatre
as well as
how many
time
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times
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which
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visitors attend
at
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the
cinema
according to
various
age
groups
in Australia over a period of 4
years
. It can be seen that the
number
of visitors
came
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who came
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to the
cinema
,
which
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apply
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stood at 62 per cent in 1996, compared to 72 per cent over the
next
2
years
. One
year
later, there was a slight decrease of 2
percent
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per cent
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before increasing to 72 per cent in 2000 in the percentage of attendees who saw a
movie
in the theatres.
In addition
, the average
of
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frequency stood at 10.3
visits
annually in 1996. And
then
, it reached
at
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11.1
times
in 1997 before dropping about 8.3
times
over the
next
3 months. In 1996, the
number
of
people
between 14 -35
years
old who went to the
cinema
about
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was about
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15
times
while
roughly 13
times
of visitors aged 35-49.
Moreover
,
people
who
aged
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are aged
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over 50 reach the lowest point at 10
times
. After one
year
, All of the
age
groups
had the same pattern , there was a significant rise of 8
times
in
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for all
groups
who came to the
cinema
. And
then
, the figures for the
year
1998 fall dramatically
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by
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nearly 15
times
in
people
who
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apply
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aged
to
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apply
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14-35.
Similarly
,
the
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both
age
groups
who
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apply
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aged 35-49 and over
the
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apply
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50
years
old sharply fall to 13
visits
and over 10
times
, respectively. In the
year
1999, the average of
visits
also
steeply increase in all of the
groups
( over 20
times
in
youngest
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the youngest
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age
group
, 20
times
in 35-49
years
old and 17
times
in 50 or more ).
At the end
of the
year
, the
cinema
visits
of each
group
rose gradually.
However
,
people
in the
over 50
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over-50
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age
group
still were the lowest frequency to see the
cinema
with under 15
times
,
whereas
the most regular
visits
were the youngest
groups
with 18
times
, approximately. In conclusion,
the
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a
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number
of citizens tends to upward
trend
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tend
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to see a
movie
annually.
According to
the charts, we can see that the
most
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apply
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age
group
seeing a
movie
theatre that was youngsters.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, next".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, movie, cinema, age, groups, years, year, visits, times, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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