Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication of what individuals really want to do in their spare time. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Nowadays people like to change their day by day activities according to the latest trends and
also
they are following popular things what their surrounding
peoples
make them popular in their area.
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essay will explain the reason why
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people are spending more
time
for popular
hobbies
rather than their individual activities.
Hobbies
and interest are different for everyone;
this
is
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human nature,which is given by god. The current generations
peoples
are very much interest in the latest trend which makes them happy and
also
help them to make more money.
For example
, cricket is the most famous game in many of the
country
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, children and teen ages are starts playing it whenever they have free
time
in their daily
life
.
This
makes them will become a star in
this
game when they reach a certain age in their
life
.
In addition
,
this
popularity will help them to make lots of money in their
life
.
Beside
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this
, there are many
hobby
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changes the
peoples
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people's
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entire
life
into different way. Those are from poor family aiming to spend more
time
to make money rather than on their own interests.
However
, some of them
are not worry
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about
the
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popular
hobbies
and interests.
For instance
, drinking alcohol is one of the popular
hobbies
between low income and
high level
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budget
peoples
interest. In conclusion, spending more
time
for
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popular
hobbies
and interests really depends on their surrounding people's activity and environments. It may be
a
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helpful for them to become a star in their
life
or spending
time
with many friends.
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