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Climate change is a phenomenon that affects countries all over the world. Many people strongly believe that it is the responsibility of individuals, rather than corporations and governments, to deal with this problem. To what extent do you agree?

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Climate changes are the most recent global concern. Some educational experts believe that
education
 about the protection of the
environment
 is as crucial as reading and writing
education
. From my point of view, it is true, and I will bring some reasons for
this
 argument in my essay. Reading and writing are essential parts of any formal process of teaching and learning. In fact, by learning how to read or write, people can get the minimum requirements for living in the world. They can communicate with each other and document their experiences for future uses. These basic parts of
education
 can lead to the progression of human society and
development
. While formal
education
 is often considered the best option for the
development
 of human
life
, it should be noted that neglecting other parts of the world,
such
 as the
environment
, may threaten human
life
.
In other words
,
development
 without environmental concern creates a large number of problems for human.
For instance
, global warming, which is the newest man-made hazard, is a significant consequence of
development
 without the protection of environments. Educational experts believe in the lack of teaching about the importance of the
environment
 is the major causes of climate changes which are strongly related to asymmetrical
development
. In my opinion, lessons about the importance of the
environment
 should be integrated into schools curriculums.
This
 non-formal
education
 is as critical as formal
education
 for developing and saving our planet.
This
 integration can
also
 increase the quality of
life
 of human beings, decreases man-made hazards and increase the
life
 expectancy of a human.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • responsibility
  • address
  • crucial role
  • impact
  • collaboration
  • carbon footprint
  • regulations
  • policies
  • incentivize
  • act responsibly
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