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: In many schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts subjects (eg. languages) and boys choose science subjects (eg. physics). What do you think are the reasons? Do you think that this tendency should be cha

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3. From my perspective, it is not necessary to change the trend.
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 with, students often choose studying environments where they can cultivate their aptitudes.
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, as they are forced to get involved in unexpected class activities or their unlike subjects which
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 produce undesirable outcomes. Not as good as, they can develop resentment or negative attitudes toward study at school.
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 , pupils regardless of gender should have their freedom of choice. In another hand, they should be at liberty to decide on any course in which they can participate to have feelings of being respected and heard. 4. In brief, separate personality and ability of boys and girls is the reason that why they have different selection subjects as well as courses. From my point of view, students should be entitled to participate in any class that they find suitable for the best.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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