Two maps show the change of a coastal town, called Pentland, from 1950 to 2007.

Two maps show the change of a coastal town, called Pentland, from 1950 to 2007.
Both of the maps illustrate the transformation of a coastal town which is
also
known as Pentland almost over than five decades between 1950 and 2007 The comparison between
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periods depicts noteworthy developments. There’s a lot of building
such
as
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area
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and other facilities were constructed in 2007 as more people moved to Pentland As a whole, the main road with two bisecting roads stays the same. The industrial area that was situated in the northwest region was demolished in 2007 and it has been replaced by multi-storey car parking. Nearby the parking site,
swimming
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pool was added and six shopping centres were built alongside the main road. After that, in the southwest region, the cinema has been established on the grassland.
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, both
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and southeast
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regions
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have
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living place
such
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of houses. There are
also
eight shopping retails on the main
road side
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. The car park was renovated and
then
relocated towards the western side.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, such".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal town
  • layout
  • undeveloped
  • infrastructure
  • landmarks
  • rural
  • significant changes
  • tourist attractions
  • residential areas
  • housing estates
  • tourism-driven economy
  • green spaces
  • beachfront properties
  • coastline
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic growth
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