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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent, do you agree or disagree.

#job #salary #consideration
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 in time, the competition in jobs has risen drastically. The major reason
of
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this
 is the
salary
 significance.
Salary
 plays an important role while choosing a
job
 as
the
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 huge chunk of
population
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 works for money. It is very much justified in prioritising
salary
 range while getting hired.
To begin
 with, the cost of living has increased significantly. The prices of basic amenities
such
 as food, clothes
has
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 gone up many folds.
As a result
 of
this
inflation
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 the employees
look out
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 for the companies which pay
higher
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salary
.
For instance
, in India people could buy their monthly groceries
in
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 3000 rupees for a family of ten whereas
currently
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 they get the same by paying rupees 7000.
This
 clearly reflects
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to
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why
salary
 is the foremost to consider.
On the contrary
, work-life balance and
job
 satisfaction should not be ignored in a
job
. Even if a person earns a lot
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 if he is unable to spend it
then
 what is the use of those earnings. To exemplify, workers work day and night to get more wages
however
, during all
this
 they pay no attention to their health.
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 they fall sick and become frustrated. In my opinion, I strongly agree that
salary
 is a prime issue in a
job
 since it helps us to go to different places, pay our bills, have a good lifestyle and much more. To conclude, society should look not just
the
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salary
 component while choosing a
job
. Personal contentment with a
job
 is necessary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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