It is a positive thing for people who are in serious management positions in companies to have much high salaries than other employees in the same company or organization.To what extent do you agree or disagree

In my opinion, I agree with the concept. People with higher management position have higher responsibilities. They have to go through a lot of difficult phases and find the best solution for the company. An association's progress depends on its hard effort and performance. They should've
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the proper decisions and solutions ,
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will face many difficulties. So they have to be a professional ,excellent ,hard-working and self-motivated person who is eager to face the problem and extract the best outcome. But It is
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move can affect the result. So every person plays their own roles as individuals and supports them in the best way. Their combined effort will bring fruitful result. So according to their
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they should have the salary.
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, their performance will be degraded.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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