We should introduce laws to make businesses and state services employ equal numbers of male and female workers in every department or area of the company. How far do you support this idea?

Nowadays,
gender
equality becomes a sensitive topic in many areas. I agree that balancing the equal number of males and females in the company will have greater advantages, but I
also
believe that imposing it on every department will not give positive development.
To begin
with,
firstly
imposing rules and regulations on firms will definitely bring advantages in various departments. It will reduce
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gender
discrimination and there will be variations in the workforce.
For instance
, If a company hire equal numbers of men and women
then
men can do
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heavy force work without any stress big paperwork. Light-weighted and pen paperwork can be done by women.
This
will increase the productivity of an organisation. Since
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there will be wider opportunities
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employment. Men and women can apply in any firm.
On the other hand
, there are some firms that only hire female or vice versa. So, there is not possible to abide by laws. Some companies hire minimum employees and if they follow the rules of equality
then
there will be more employees than the requirement in the firm. There are
also
other ways to encourage
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equality,
for instance
, the government should give scholarship to
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females so that they can do higher studies and can be placed in any departments. To conclude, I agree to remove
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gender
discrimination there should be
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law to hire
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number of employees.
On the contrary
, I
also
think it will not give overall positive results. There
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also
other methods to remove
gender
discrimination.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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