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shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different ‎educational settings in the UK in 2010.‎

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The given bar chart compares
British
 people's emigration in
Australia
,
Spain
, ‎New
Zealand
, the
USA
, and
France
 for four years. Overall,
Australia
 was the most popular emigration destination for
British
 ‎citizens. The data was taken from the International Passenger Survey/ ONS ‎source. ‎ According to the bar graph, more than 40
thousand
British
 migrated to
Australia
 ‎in 2004 while
this
number
 in
Spain
 was just below 35
thousand
. In
this
year
's ‎
British
 migration in New
Zealand
, the
USA
 and
France
 were about 22, 24, and 21 ‎
thousand
 consecutively. The
next
year
 the
British
 preferred
France
 for migration, ‎where more than 32
thousand
British
 went. As it can be observed,
Australia
 remained the most popular migration place for ‎
British
 people in
this
year
 while
this
number
 slightly decreased for New
Zealand
 ‎and the
USA
. In 2006, the
number
 of
British
 migrants in
Australia
 increased ‎significantly, reaching over 50
thousand
 while it decreased slightly in
Spain
, New ‎
Zealand
, and
France
 than
last
year
. In the
USA
this
number
 increased to about 24 ‎
thousand
 while it was lowest in New
Zealand
 (21
thousand
).In 2007, more than ‎‎40
thousand
British
 migrated to
Australia
 while just over 30
thousand
 migrated ‎to
Spain
. In the other three countries,
this
number
 was from 21 to 27
thousand
.‎
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