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below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different ‎attractions in Brighton.‎

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The given line graph depicts the
percentage
 of inhabitants of the United Kingdom, over 4 years of age, who watched
television
 and listened to
radio
 over the course of a day from October 1992 to December 1992. The lowest number of listeners for
radio
 is after midnight when they start dropping, touching a minimum of below 5% at around 2 am.
In contrast
, the minimum for
television
 viewing is at 6 am when it is at 0%. Interestingly, the
percentage
 of
radio
 audiences never drops to zero at any time throughout the 24 hour period.
Conversely
, there is a huge difference in the highest number of audiences for the two media being compared.
Television
 viewership is at a
peak
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 at a little below 50%, whereas the maximum
percentage
 that the
radio
 auditors reach is approximately 30% of the UK population. A striking feature is that both these peaks are at about 8, but it is in the evening for the
television
 viewers and in the morning for the
radio
 listeners.
Moreover
, the
percentage
 of
television
 and
radio
 audiences among the UK populace is only similar at around 2 am (below 5%) and around 2 pm (approximately 15%).
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