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The given line graph reports the
sales
 of
gold
 in Dubai over a twelve-month period,starting from January in the year 2002.
Beside
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, the graph reveals
worst
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 in the months of July and September. As can be seen from the graph the Dubai
gold
 market recorded the
sales
 of
gold
 in a range between 120m
Durhams
 and 350m
Durhams
 in 2002.when the
sales
 opened in January,they were reported to be at 200m
Durhams
,which
then
 grew slightly at
first
 and dramatically later to peak at 350m
Durhams
 in March.Following March though,the
sales
 witnessed a slump with a relatively steady decline seen for over the following four months until July when the cumulative consumption came down to one of the two
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 lows at about 120m
Durhams
.
Although
 the
sales
 were seen to fluctuate later with brief rise-and-fall until October,they
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however
 remained relatively stable at a little under 200m
Durhams
 in the following months. All in all, the 2002 Dubai
gold
sales
 witnessed an erratic trend across the year with varied patterns of
sales
 being recorded for different quarters growth in the
first
 a persistent decline in the
second
 and beyond,and relative stasis in the
last
 one where the
sales
 converged at
the initial
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sales
 value.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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