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The best way to travel is travel in a group led by a tour guide. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#travel #group #tour #guide
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Nowadays,
people
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 have their own preferences about how to
travel
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. Some
people
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 prefer to
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 alone others prefer to
travel
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 in groups with
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tour
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a tour
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guide
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. I agree that it is the greatest way to
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 as a
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 with a
tour
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guide
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 for several reasons.
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, a
tour
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guide
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 will let
people
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 know about the
places
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 they will visit and show
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 best
places
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.
Tour
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 guides are specially trained about the local history and significance of all the
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 the region. Most of the
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,
people
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 travelling alone do not know the
places
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 to visit and so waste a lot of
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 trying to find something valuable to see.
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,
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 guides know things about a certain place that are not generally mentioned in books or brochures.
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, guided tours are the best way in terms of sightseeing in a short
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.
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, travelling in a
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 can ensure safety. Many parts of the world are quite dangerous to
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 alone. There are often
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 with evil intention waiting to do harm to tourists.
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, when one of my friends once backpacked across Europe by herself, she got in trouble because a homeless person took her passport and wallet. She had to call the embassy and dealt with the situation. In the
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 she was not able to finish her trip, which could have been a once in a lifetime opportunity for her to spend
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 quality
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 with herself. When travelling with
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 guides, they can protect their
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 members from
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 kind of dangerous situation. In conclusion,
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 some
people
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 might agree that travelling as a
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 with a
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guide
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 is not the best idea, I strongly agree with the idea that travelling in the
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 with
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guide
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 is the best decision in terms of great information and safety.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • organization
  • knowledgeable
  • itinerary
  • local customs
  • language barrier
  • freedom
  • flexibility
  • random
  • spontaneous
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