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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Some people believe that
universities
shoud
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should
 learn
students
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future
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other
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others
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 argue that the real
fuction
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function
 of
university
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the university
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 should
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 people's knowledge without care if the studies are important for
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future work
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future
 work.
This
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competences
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 are so important and should be deeply
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touched
teached
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 during a university course.
Theorical
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Theoretical
 subjects are still important for
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 that
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 mainly based on humanistic studies. In fact, it is easy to understand how is important for the people who study
psichology
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psychology
 or history
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 a solid base of knowledge.
For example
, for
students
 that would be
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 they must know perfectly the subject they teach because only in
this
 way they are able to explain correctly the arguments to their
future
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alumnus
alumni
 and let them
to
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enjoy the lessons.
Conversely
, there are specific fields of study that required a different approach. Subjects like
economy
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 and informatic are still explained in a
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theoretical
 way while it is clear how a practical approach may benefits
students
 learning them how to resolve problems that they could face during their
future
carreers
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careers
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addiction
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, they might develop
trasversal
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transversal
 skills that are fundamental both during
the
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work and in
the
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daily life. To
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instance
distance
, many
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 post-graduate are facing
difficults
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difficulties
difficult
difficulty
 to find
a jobs
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a job
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 because the
universities
 never teach them the
compenteces
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competences
competencies
 that are requested during a job interview. To conclude
,
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 is important that
universities
 provide knowledge to develop
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 own culture especially regarding some subjects. Despite
this
, it is fundamental that
universities
 allocate more time to developing practical skills because only in
this
 way
students
 will be able to face troubles during their job.
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