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Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is sometimes argued that getting
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 too soon can give us more advantages than the drawback in term of the payment problem. In my opinion, it would definitely make the
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 worse if we can easily
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 to
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card
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. There are several benefits of
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financial.
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, we do not have to carry around the cash and you can buy anything at the moment without concerning amount
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, which is very
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 because we can just only keep the
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 in the pocket.
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, the
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 provides you
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bonus point to redeem the goods in every purchase.
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 reason, many people can get
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expensive items without buying
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 directly.
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,
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additional discounts were offered when you use
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. So that, we can get
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 cheaper price while using it.
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, the drawbacks of
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overconvenience
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over convenience
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consequences
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,
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credit card
 can let you gain the extra expense by buying without planning, which
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 issue can lead to the
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 consequence, the huge amounts of
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. The
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 rate of the
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 is high in common and
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serious when you can not pay the
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 on time.
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, the debt can be contributed by a
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 of good’s
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 and become unable to pay in the future. In conclusion, I can understand why some people might still prefer to use
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, but it seems to me that the disadvantages of a
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outweigh
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advantages
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • financial security
  • unexpected expenses
  • rewards and incentives
  • cashback
  • airline miles
  • impulse buying
  • accumulating debt
  • high interest rates
  • minimum payments
  • credit score
  • borrowing capacity
  • reliance
  • saving habits
  • financial vulnerability
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