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Nowadays many families move overseas for job opportunities. Some people think this is beneficial for the children of these families, while others think children will find it difficult. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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At the present time, more and more
families
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 are immigrating to foreign countries in search of better job opportunities. While some people think
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 is for the betterment of
children
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 of these
families
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, others,
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, believe
children
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 will certainly find it difficult to adjust to the changes. In my view,
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children
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 may suffer cultural shock in the beginning, in the long ,run they will be certainly benefited from
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 change. To start with, one of the main reasons for
families
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 moving to foreign soil is to give their
children
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 and themselves a good and safe lifestyle. Which they were deprived of in their home
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.
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, many
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 from Indian aims to get settled in Canada for better education and medical
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, which is one of the most important things the child needs at an early age.
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, these
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 are absolutely free in countries like Canada.
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, it is evident that
children
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 of these
families
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 not only enjoy a good quality lifestyle, but
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 free education and medical
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 which eventually reduces the financial burden of parents. The only problem which
children
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 may face is cultural difference problem. When
children
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 shift to a new
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 they are unaware of the culture , language and traditions of the host
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, due to which they find it difficult to communicate with their peers and find themselves isolated.
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 problem gradually gets solved, as and when the
children
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 get mixed up with other pupils and these enhance their communication skills
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. To sum up, admittedly kids can take some time to adjust to the new culture of the foreign
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 but
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 is certainly beneficial for the
children
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 as they get an excellent education and medical
facilities
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 which either free or at low cost.
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