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Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the era of modernisation,
people
's way of thinking has transformed. Earlier there used to be great career opportunities for exam based courses but not for
the
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art-based
subjects
. Some educationalists bring up a thought that
subjects
 like music , dance , art and craft should be made compulsory in order to believe the best academic outcomes in a
child
's overall
perfromance
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performance
. I strongly agree with the given thought .
To begin
 with , the trend has been changing .
People
 now not only consider academically strong students for higher education or job opportunities
,
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 but
the
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all rounder
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 profiles.
People
 with all
roundership
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rounders
 tend to improve the work culture and mark up a great value to any organisation. They could willingly take part in competitions and bring fortune to the brand names they are associated
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. The main reason is that
people
donot
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do not
don't
 want to just excel in a particular field, but want to be more open to multiple fields
Secondly
, introducing
such
subjects
 directly affects the active functioning of a
child
. Some academic
subjects
 could be boring and exhausting and to perform
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 in them tends to stand as a burden in a
child
's life. When
subjects
 which are more of a fun and practical enjoyment rather than cramming from books are introduced, a
child
 gets interested and can freshen up his mind to start back into learning things.
Also
,
such
subjects
 always
opens
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 up doors for students to opt for careers
into
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 the respective fields if they really ace at it.
This
 eventually defines a greater career choice than forcing oneself into studies. To conclude, to introduce fun courses in education system build a youth which is
hastle
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hassle
 free and lives the career with their own choice.
This
 in turn reduces stress and can offer a happy life to
people
.
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