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Men and women are different in terms of their characteristics and abilities. For this reasons, some jobs are better done by men and other by women. Do you agree or disagree?

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female
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 are indispensable without each other.
However
, it is opinionated that dissimilarities between men and
women
 whether in terms of physical appearance or capabilities, has eventually resulted in sex-specific job placements.
However
, I do agree with
this
 and
further
 in my ,
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 I will explain it.
Women
 are gifted with patience, kindness and resilience.
Women
 are not only emotionally strong but meticulous at their work, which in turn, demands a lot of devotion both in terms of time and energy. To explain it
further
, the
women
 are prefered choice for working in schools especially in kindergartens because it requires love and care in understanding new budding blooms.
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 being more approachable, female teachers quickly develop
a cordial relationships
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 with their pupils,
thus
 creating a more healthy and friendly atmosphere for learning. In ,addition
women
 are
also
 considered efficient at nursing care, for the sufferers, either in hospitals or at old age homes. Since
,
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 they are excellent in maintaining a balance between their professional liabilities and personal duties so, these jobs are performed
by
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them
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effortlessly with full dedication and responsibility. Their respectful behaviour and attitude are more appreciated by elderly people and
this
 forms a homely environment with much-added comfort and ease. To conclude, men and
women
 are equally responsible for running
this
 world, but certain work areas are more gender-specific and are carried more efficiently and perfectly by them.
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