Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
In every sector,
work
is on first
priority. Because with the help of work
people can achieve their goal as well as
Add the comma(s)
, as well as work,
work
make their personal life full with needs. But, some popularity go with shortcut
in their workplace so, they make sometimes good or bad Add an article
a shortcut
the shortcut
relation
with their colleagues or senior. Some people claim thatReplace the word
relationship
,
Remove the comma
apply
healthy
connection is not crucial as compared to Add an article
the healthy
a healthy
work
. In my opinion
I Add a comma
,opinion
am not totally agree
with Change the verb form
do not totally agree
above
statement becauseAdd an article
the above
,
for mental health both are essential.
Remove the comma
apply
To begin
with, every person have
different nature, thinking style etc. but, some human Change the verb form
has
want
to be just like them. Due to Change the verb form
wants
these reason
, in offices people cant match their way Change the determiner
this reason
these reasons
thinking
and they do not have healthy Change preposition
of thinking
relation
. Fix the agreement mistake
relations
For instance
, manager sometimes dominate on their junior for doing work
in same
way like him but, junior has their own style so, due to these reason Add an article
the same
relation
between boss and employee are not much good and its straight impact on their official work
as well as on their mind.
Secondly
, work
is always on first
priority of every worker. BecauseAdd an article
the first
,
Remove the comma
apply
work
gives them satisfaction for mind and good hike for living personal life. Moreover
, if humankind focus on their work
then
they got promotion
in their Correct article usage
a promotion
work
life. For example
, the Narendra Modi he is noe
prime minister of India he always Correct your spelling
now
no
not
focus
on their Change the verb form
focuses
work
but as well as he maintain
good Change the verb form
maintains
relation
with other MLA, opposite party and all members.
For example
, Dr.
APJ Abdul Kalam Change the punctuation
Dr
he
was Correct pronoun usage
apply
aerospace
scientist. His Add an article
an aerospace
first
priority is doing best
Correct pronoun usage
his best
work
but, they always maintain their healthy relation
with their junior as well as collagues
. So, now he got Correct your spelling
colleagues
place
in every heart from child to all Add an article
a place
type
of person.
Fix the agreement mistake
types
Lastly
in my conclusion, “work
is worship” every person have their responsibility to do work
at their workplace but, with making healthy relation
because its
Change the pronoun
it
directly
affect on their mental health as well as their Replace the word
direct
work
also
. So, do not focus on relation
but, try to avoid dominate
and argue with Replace the word
dominant
partner
Add an article
a partner
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