Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

In every sector,
work
is on
first
priority. Because with the help of
work
people can achieve their goal
as well as
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work
make their personal life full with needs. But, some popularity go with
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in their workplace so, they make sometimes good or bad
relation
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relationship
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with their colleagues or senior. Some people claim that
,
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healthy
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connection is not crucial as compared to
work
. In my
opinion
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I
am not totally agree
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with
above
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the above
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statement because
,
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for mental health both are essential.
To begin
with, every person
have
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different nature, thinking style etc. but, some human
want
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to be just like them. Due to
these reason
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, in offices people cant match their way
thinking
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of thinking
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and they do not have healthy
relation
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relations
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.
For instance
, manager sometimes dominate on their junior for doing
work
in
same
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way like him but, junior has their own style so, due to these reason
relation
between boss and employee are not much good and its straight impact on their official
work
as well as on their mind.
Secondly
,
work
is always on
first
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priority of every worker. Because
,
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work
gives them satisfaction for mind and good hike for living personal life.
Moreover
, if humankind focus on their
work
then
they got
promotion
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in their
work
life.
For example
, the Narendra Modi he is
noe
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now
no
not
prime minister of India he always
focus
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on their
work
but as well as he
maintain
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maintains
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good
relation
with other MLA, opposite party and all members.
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,
Dr.
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APJ Abdul Kalam
he
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was
aerospace
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an aerospace
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scientist. His
first
priority is doing
best
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work
but, they always maintain their healthy
relation
with their junior as well as
collagues
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colleagues
. So, now he got
place
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a place
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in every heart from child to all
type
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types
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of person.
Lastly
in my conclusion, “
work
is worship” every person have their responsibility to do
work
at their workplace but, with making healthy
relation
because
its
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directly
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affect on their mental health as well as their
work
also
. So, do not focus on
relation
but, try to avoid
dominate
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and argue with
partner
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