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People are consuming more and more sugar-based drinks. Why? What can be done to reduce sugary drink consumption?

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In
this
 day and age, one of the most popular issues is that more and more
people
 are keen on using
the
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an
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 excessive amount of sugar-based
drinks
. From my perspective, there are many reasons why
people
 follow
this
 trend,
however
, there are
also
 many available solutions to combat. There are numerous factors contributing to consuming too
much
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many
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 sugar-based
drinks
.
To begin
 with, using soft
drinks
 makes
people
 comfortable and pleasant. To be specific, the weather is usually very hot in the middle of the day which makes
people
 thirsty and they prefer using soft
drinks
 as the way for cooling.
Moreover
,
the
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sugar-based
drinks
 are likely to attract customers thanks to their delicious taste. In fact, many
people
 have a sweet tooth , so it is unsuitable in writing. and they tend to consume a huge amount of sugar from
products
such
 as soft
drinks
 or other
products
 containing sugar. The
second
 idea lacks coherence because in the subtopic sentence you mention delicious taste, but in supporting detail, you mention the favourite
flavor
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 of consumers. A number of solutions can be taken to reduce the consumption of
sugar
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sugary
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drinks
.
First
 and foremost, the government can require a tax for kinds of sugary
products
. It means that consumers have to afford the amount of money much more to buy a can of coca or soda → wrong grammar→ confusing idea and the price of
products
 will become more expensive as well as reduce the number of buyers.
In addition
, advertisements need to have
a
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strict control by the authority to limit
its
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their
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 attraction to consumers.
Instead
, the program of healthy eating and organic
products
 should be encouraged to spread to everyone. In conclusion, many reasons can explain why the majority of
people
 prefer using soft
drinks
.
Besides
, having many solutions can be taken to minimize the above issue.
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