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Some people say is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and incHistorylude any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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While some may argue that
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 is one of the most crucial
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, others claim that
science
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 and
technology
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 are more fundamental.
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history
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 has many benefits
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 as learning from mistakes and developing more rounded people.
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 and foremost, the past is full of mistakes as George
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 once quoted: “Those who are unable to recall the past are doomed to repeat it.”, there have been numerous warning flags in the past. We must be able to reflect
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 events that led up to them, learn from past mistakes and reject as well as question similar patterns if we notice the arising.
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, there are many stories, some are uplifting and motivating while others are disordering and immoral. If we dive into the fascinating world of
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 are many important lessons for
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 to learn.
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, learning
history
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 is very beneficial =, and as claimed by many, to be one of the most important
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 at
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, if
history
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past events,
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 and
technology
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 are two
subjects
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which
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 are destined for the future as they help
students
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 to identify what is wrong on the internet as well as
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 and leading them to the
technology
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-relied future.
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 of all, “The
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 is killed by saunas and alcohol!”, during the
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 wave of the virus,
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a wonderful news
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, unfortunately, the news was without a doubt from scientific studies to be fake, but people still believe it because they do not understand viruses,
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 the result of not studying biology, a branch subject of
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. In
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,
students
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 who learn
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 acknowledge that the news was not true and in a humorous manner cut their spending.
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, nowadays, we have all witnessed the importance of
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 and how we are already relying on it. Learning
technology
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 the new age of engineering.
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,
science
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technology
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, as believed by the majority of the population is more critical
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that
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history
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 in schools’ curriculum. In conclusion, despite conflicting ideas whether
history
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 is more crucial than
science
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 and
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technology related
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subjects
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 are not, in my opinion,
science
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 and
technology
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 is the more critical subject at
school
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 than
history
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.
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