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Women and men are commonly seen as having different strengths and weaknesses. Is it right to exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?

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It is evident that the
gender
 gap is closing in the vast majority of occupations in today’s society.
However
, some remain with the opinion that females and males are born to have differences in terms of their vocational preferences. Despite
this
, I would argue in
this
 essay that it is wrong to exclude a certain
gender
 from a certain occupation. It is undoubtedly that a certain
gender
 could be more appreciated in some professions. It is mainly determined by the biological differences between males and females.
For example
, females are perceived to be more caring and nurturing by nature, so that they could be more suitable working in nurseries and hospitals; whereas, males are more likely to be employed in mining and construction industries because they are physically stronger. In those cases, the
gender
 gap may remain in the short future.
However
, for the vast majority of professions, making occupations more open to both
genders
 has significant advantages. Different
genders
 could bring different perspectives into work, which could generate more possibilities for a company’s development.
For example
, a male nurse could offer his unique experience to a female-dominated team in order to promote more holistic care to patients of both
genders
.
Moreover
, there is evidence that a mixed-
gender
 working environment is often proven to be more efficient.
Therefore
, companies could benefit from the different perspectives and efficiency that mixed
gender
 teams bring. To conclude,
although
 some occupations remain to be female- or male-dominant, there are more advantages to allow both
genders
 to have the freedom of their vocational choices. Companies that facilitate
this
 equality could benefit from the increased possibilities and efficiency.
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