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Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others believe a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #job #satisfaction #security
Global
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The global
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 economy has changed in the past two years. Many
people
 suffered from laid-off after
COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic. Plenty of jobs were cut off owing to the outbreak of
virus
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the virus
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.
This
 situation
trigged
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triggered
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 employees to think of the importance between
job
 security and satisfaction. In my opinion , I choose to work in a solid company
instead
.
First
 of all, a
job
 with satisfaction usually comes up with enjoyment. The harder you work, the more feeling of
success
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successful
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people
 have. It is
nature
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natural
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 for someone to enjoy
the
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a
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 happy atmosphere whenever you have finished their tasks.
This
 sense of belonging keep on encouraging them to achieve more.
Thus
, they keen on working harder to achieve more joy.
Nevertheless
, too
much
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many
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 duties assigned to them may lead to chances of danger. The more they are able to do, the more responsibility they bear. They put themselves at risk if they failed to finish essential missions.
On the other hand
, a permanent
job
 gives out stability indicated that
people
 are unnecessary to worry about falling into unemployment. The provision of cash flow strength stemmed from stable salary contributes to the financial status.
Nonetheless
,
relatively
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a relatively
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 safe
job
 means
lack
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a lack
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 of opportunity to establish
ability
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the ability
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of
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apply
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oneself.
This
 may cause
bad
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a bad
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 influence
to
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on
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career
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the career
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 pathway.
Moreover
,
people
 will easily get lost in their career and
therefore
 laziness may appear because of deficiency of impact during working
hour
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hours
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. In conclusion, a
job
 you are satisfied with provides you enjoyment and happiness.
However
, it is relatively unsafe in
working
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a working
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 environment compared with
secure
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a secure
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job
.
On
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contrast
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the contrast
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,
the
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a
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 healthy financial condition will
be benefit
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be benefited
be benefiting
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 from a lifelong
job
 but you will be getting lazy if there
is
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are
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 insufficient challenges.
Hence
, if I must choose between
job
 satisfaction and financial security, I will definitely opt for the
later
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latter
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 one.
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