In the past employees worked in small business. Nowadays most employees work in bigger businesses. Do working in bigger business have more advantagees or not? Write ans with eg.

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Most
people
in
modern
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the modern
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era are
emplyed
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employed
in
lagre
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large
organizations comparative to small scale industries in past. I find that these have more
advantagees
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advantages
advantageous
because they not only provide better allowance to
eomployees
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employees
but
also
provde
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provide
job security. Bigger
companies
provide
beeter
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better
allowances to
people
.
Reason
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The reason
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being they have more turnover and
geneate
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generate
higher
profite
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profit
profits
profile
, so Human resource department of these
companies
provide benefits to their staff
such
as transport allowance and seasonal bonus.
Moreover
,
people
get incentives based on
performance
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the performance
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of
company
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the company
a company
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.Had the
companies
not generated so much
profi
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profit
, there would be no additional bonuses for
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the employee
an employee
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employee
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employees
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.
In addition
to the aforementioned advantages, these provide job security. To elaborate more, these
companies
are experienced in Market strategies and not affected by market recessions.
Thus
there are
less
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fewer
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chances of
people
getting fired. As evidence, Reliance
industries
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Industries
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and Tata Groups did not
decunt
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decant
decent
number
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a number
the number
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of
employee
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the employee
an employee
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during COVID situation.
Thus
individuals are keen to work in
such
industries. To recapitulate, they provide extra bonuses
besides
job
secuities
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securities
.
Therefore
, I am convinced that there are more advantages of these
businees
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business
businesses
than small businesses.
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