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Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport and dirty water. Do you think that governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today’s tourism industry?

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In these contemporary days,
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ever-increasing
tourism
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 has made
whole
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 world a global village;
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, it has brought numerous dire consequences including burgeoning of pollution owing to
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 and road transport and polluted water. In order to control it, It is believed by a vast section of the society that the tariffs should be introduced by authority on flights or accommodation. I strongly agree with
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 view and in my discourse ahead, the ideas in
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 of my belief are discussed.
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 with, it seems obvious to see that extra tax on
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 tickets would restrict
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 travelling.
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 is because the final cost to passengers for
air
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 journey will be higher if
government
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 impose more taxes. Resultantly, people's preference to go overseas during holidays would be changed and they prefer to visit local
tourist
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 attractions which ultimately would reduce serious effects of it on
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.
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, as per
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 published in the Toronto Times in 2019 Singapore airlines imposed
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% tax on domestic airlines which had reduced
air
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 travelling by 30% compared to
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 year.
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,
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government's
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 initiative by enforcing taxes would restrict
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.
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, another prominent measure to control tourists' movement at
tourist
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places
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 is additional charges by local bodies on accommodation.
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, due to extra
charge
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, visitors will have to pay more to enjoy at
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places
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.
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 would certainly restrict
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 of international and local guests'
preference
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 to various
places
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 which ultimately reduced unwanted outcomes.
A
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 best illustration is the
Canada
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government
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 started to charge
additional
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 20% tax on all luxurious hotels at
tourist
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places
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 which
has
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 restricted
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 by 15% which
has
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 curtail water pollution.
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, the stringent measure by
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government
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 can minimize
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 effects of
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. In conclusion, while the growth in
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tourism
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 industry has numerous unequivocal positives, according to me, I think to curb its inevitable impacts
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environment
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, the
government
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 should start to charge more to
air
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 tickets and bookings at
tourist
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 attractions.
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  • ecological impact
  • sustainability
  • eco-friendly
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental degradation
  • economic dependency
  • tax revenue
  • sustainable tourism
  • regulation
  • policy measures
  • consumer behavior
  • incentives
  • disincentives
  • green tourism
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