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When the time comes to commence full-time employment, individuals who have graduated from university deserve a higher salary than those who have not. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, there are a lot of discussions about the link between
education
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 at the
university
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 and the wage of employees.
Although
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 some people assume that the salary should vary according to the number of
skills
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 and amount of
knowledge
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 which employees possess regardless of their
education
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, I believe that
university
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 graduates should have a higher income as they have some background
knowledge
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;
additionally
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, they already have some
skills
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 which might lead to promotions in the career. To start with, students who have just finished high
education
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 have enough raw
knowledge
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 in comparison with those who have not;
therefore
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, there is almost no need to spend some time in order to teach employees how to act within the team, how to do specific
work
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 related to the field of their
work
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 and other aspects. The only issue which may face newcomers is a lack of
work
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 experience.
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, they do not know how to apply
knowledge
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 learned at the
university
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.
Furthermore
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,
university
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education
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 provides a base that leads to
further
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 promotions at the
work
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. If a person has finished,
for instance
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, a medical school, he had some medical
skills
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 which provide an opportunity to reach the highest ranks by promotion;
however
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, if the one has not, at some point he may face a barrier that prevents
further
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 promotions and high salaries, respectively.
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, it is necessary to get a high degree. In the light of the thoughts elaborated upon below, I would like to conclude that graduates of high academic institutions deserve a higher wage than people who do not have a high degree because
university
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 leavers do not require to obtain some
skills
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 which help to be promoted at the job, as they get them during studying;
moreover
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, the main things which they need are to learn how to apply
knowledge
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 in practice and improve existing
skills
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.

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