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Percentage of UK people who consumed daily recommended amount of fruit and vegetable in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

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The statistic gives some data about UK population consumed the number of fruit and vegetables. As well,
this
 statistic was shown the amount of 2002,2006,2010 for men,
women
 and
children
. Overall, units are measured in the per
cent
. General, the per
cent
 of
women
 in 3 years outnumbered than the others,
in
contrast
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 the minimum percentages belonged to the show of
children
. With regards to men and
women
,
women
's 2002 and 2010 statistics were relatively similar (25% and 26% respectively),
however
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 the high rate was appreciated with thirty-two in every one hundred.
On the other hand
, males' 2002, 2006, 2010 years indexes were closer to each other, but
the
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the
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maximum per
cent
 was illustrated in 2006 with twenty-six in every one hundred,in
constrast
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contrast
 the least pointer belonged to
2002
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 year with 22%.
Finally
, males' 2006 year statistic
leveled
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 off females' 2010 year pointer In terms of
children
,
children
's 2006 and 2010 shows were relatively similar to each other,
however
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 the maximum show was appreciated with 18% in 2006,
in
contrast
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 the least per
cent
 was illustrated with eleven in every one hundred.
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