Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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of
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TV
shows and
games
on PC are considered as a primary source of entertainment. There is a section of
society
who
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believes that
content
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the content
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of these
medium
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mediums
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has become violent in today’s age, which will create
negative
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a negative
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impact
on
society
. I would argue that these elements do not significantly
impact
human
behavior
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in our
society
.
Firstly
, who believes that
games
on PC and
TV
shows are cruel might argue that these entertainment sources exhibit inhuman behaviour and would certainly increase the aggression level of
individual
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the individual
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.
For instance
, movies
such
as Hostel and shows like
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, are harsh for the
first
-time audience.
In addition
, today’s
games
are nothing more than the organized platform for virtual crimes,
such
as robberies, accidents and invading a region.
Thus
, playing
such
games
will increase
the
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inhumanity and will be destructive for young minds.
On the other hand
, my view is that Individual own choices make
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impact
in
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his /her character.
In other words
, educated person with strong will and positive attitude are rarely impacted by the harmful activities in surrounding.
Secondly
, these days their
lot
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of education programs on
TV
which are beneficial to school children.
Similarly
,
games
on PC helps to boost brain power and improve strategic thinking. If the content of these entertainment channels is so destructive
than
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violence would only begin since their evolution but,
the
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inhumanity existed in
society
even before the invention of
TV
and computers. In conclusion,
TV
and computer
games
have become harsh to some extent
,
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and might
impact
the
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society
, but these factors are not creating any
impact
on self-determined and positive people. In my opinion, illiteracy and ignorance are responsible factors of aggression after watching the brutal content .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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