Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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on self-determined and positive people. In my opinion, illiteracy and ignorance are responsible factors of aggression after watching the brutal content .

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