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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and techonlogy. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 period, humans have strived to achieve perfection by researching and studying the various areas of life. For some people, it is the current debate on the notion whether students should be allowed to
study
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 the
subjects
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 of their own choice or they must be constrained to
study
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 limited number of fundamental
subjects
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such
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science
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 and
technology
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.
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 with, in my opinion, undergraduates must be allowed to explore the multitude of
study
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 domains.
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, humans are inherited with the tendency to research for their own expansion of wisdom.
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, it is imperative for
young
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 populace to sweat blood in new dimensions of research for the advancement of mankind.
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,
being
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 not only restricted to the fundamental
subjects
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 of
science
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 and
technology
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,
it is
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but it is also
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 indispensable for the young generations to unravel the mystery of
subjects
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 as arts and culture.
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, people from around the world visit India to
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 its culture and to learn arts, making
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contribution
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 to the country.
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, some people believe that it is not fruitful to squander time on domains other than
science
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 and
technology
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. Since they believe that the future is restricted to
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. In my belief, the development of
human
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 race is mostly dependent on those areas.To illustrate, most of the inventions related to
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 medicines
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 as penicillin and equipment
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 were discovered and invented because of
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scientific endeavours. To conclude, without sitting on the fence, I opine that it is a paramount job for any institution to provide the facility for its students to
study
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 any subject, they acknowledge to be interesting. Since I believe that there are many mysteries that are needed to be unfolded beyond
science
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 and
technology
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.

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