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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

More and more
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 are now
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 to other countries for higher studies, medical treatment, business and tourism. Some
people
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 feel that
visitors
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 should follow the culture and tradition of their
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country
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 when they are abroad. Others,
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, feel that the
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 nation should respect cultural diversity. In my opinion,
visitors
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 should respect the local culture. The
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country
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 should
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 show a willingness to embrace
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 from around the
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. There are several advantages to respecting diverse
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. To start with, it creates a cosmopolitan environment in the
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 and develops a sense of tolerance in the
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.
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 attitude will
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 them when they visit another
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. Another
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 of embracing diversity is that it makes life more interesting. Variety, after all, is the spice of life. When
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 belonging to different
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 live in one place everyone will be able to enjoy a variety of cuisines, wear different kinds of clothes, celebrate exotic festivals and learn several languages.
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 not only makes life more interesting but
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 helps the local economy. The United States and the European Union nations are home to
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 from all over the
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. Their success and their growth rates are a result of their willingness to accept the best talent from all over the
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 irrespective of their cultural backgrounds. While it is true that a nation can
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 from cultural diversity, it does not mean that local
cultures
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 and traditions should be ignored. They should be promoted too and a nation can encourage
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 to follow the local customs;
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, in my opinion, imposing them on a visitor is unwarranted.
Visitors
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 who follow the local customs
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benefit
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. They have better chances of blending themselves with the local community. They
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 enjoy
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 degree of acceptance. To conclude, a
host
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country
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 should always welcome diverse
people
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 with diverse
cultures
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 from all over the
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;
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,
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 should not be at the expense of the local culture.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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