Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

Nowadays all the people have their own
car
because during the
last
thirty years the purchase of cars is sharply increased and
this
is the cause of the intensive traffic in many cities. In
this
essay, I will explain my opinion and
then
I try to give some possible solutions to overcome the problem.
Firstly
, I think that having your own
car
can be really
usefull
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useful
due to the fact that you can move wherever you want,
in addition
, if you live in a remote area where
the
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public transports are
insufficent
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insufficient
you need
a transport
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transport
a means of transport
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for moving and the
car
can be a solution.
Although
the
car
make
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the owner
indipendent
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independent
from public
trasports
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transports
transport
, the traffic in the city is
stressfull
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stressful
and the
goverment
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government
has to find a solution. For
examples
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,
the
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public transport could improve the
efficency
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efficiency
of buses,trams or undergrounds
for
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encouraging people to choose them as
alternative
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way of moving. For
examples
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, living in Milan, I experienced that in some hours during the day we can not drive the
car
because the time for arriving in a place can be threefold increased and for
this
reason
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I usually walk or I rent a bike-sharing for long distances. In conclusion, I think that having a
car
can be comfortable because you can be
indipendent
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independent
,
on the
contrary
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there is a problem
of
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traffic,
expecially
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especially
in some cities, where you can not move in
severel
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several
hours of the day.
However
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the
goverment
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government
could
encurage
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encourage
people using the public transports or improving
alternative
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way of moving as bike-sharing.
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