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Some people argue job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others believe a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #job #satisfaction #security
It is thought by some
people
 that
the
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job
 satisfaction
more
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is more
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 essential than security
work
. Some
peolpe
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people
 might think that
adventage
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advantage
 of working for
permanent
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a permanent
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job
 is more
nescessary
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necessary
. In my opinion, I believe that a
satifie
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satisfied
job
 could be more
benefitcial
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beneficial
. The advantage of working for only
satisfie
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satisfied
job
 is that
people
 can gain happiness by
itself
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themselves
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 for doing the
job
 they are good at. In
addion
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addition
, It
is provide
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 an opportunity to
acquir
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acquire
 and develop individual expertise and knowledge of a particular
job
 and more motivate by using skills that they are trained for and through
job
 satisfaction. 
As a result
, It
is allow
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 the
people
 that
work
 for their
satifie
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satisfied
job
 could
be create
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create
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 new innovation without
perssure
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pressure
.
For example
, a friend of mind resign
for
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from
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 a permanent
job
 and
start up
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 with
new
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a new
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 business that he
complacent
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is complacent
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, so
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with, so
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 he can
achive
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achieve
 his career goals.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that working for
permanent
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the permanent
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job
 could be
benefitcial
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beneficial
 as It offers
people
 to have more stability
of
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 life.
However
,
people
 who
work
 in the same organisation all their working could be boring and less their motivate, which could not help them for
enhance
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 their expertise. In conclusion, it depends on
person's
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a person's
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 preference to decide or their situation, whether to
work
 for
job
 satisfaction or
work
 for a permanent
job
. Either the choices could lead to success and
important
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are important
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.
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