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People value the opinions of other collect information from various sources when considering a major purchase. Which of the following do you think has the greatest impoct on their choice of what to buy? recommendations from friends information from magazines reviews from online communities

#people #value #information #sources #purchase #impoct #choice #recommendations #friends #magazines #reviews #communities
Consumers
 evaluate some
products
 when making decisions to buy, on the basis of the opinions of others and information from varied sources: recommendations from friends, information from magazines, reviews
rom
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from
 online communities. These options have their own advantages to be chosen by purchasers. Of them, the
last
 has the biggest impact on people’s
consumming
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consuming
 of what to buy at the moment with big data accumulated on popular
web sites
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. To start with, friends’ recommendations were the best way for the past citizens’ decision of consuming something, because there
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 little information from mass media and online. Without convenient devices that
helps
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 residents far away in distance to easily and in
real time
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communicate
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 with each other,
consumers
 should have checked out their acquaintances’ reputations on
products
 that they
supposed
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 to pay for.
Hence
, the old-fashioned method works throughout
only
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small
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a small
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 number of
consumers
 who know each other in person and influences
on
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everyday lives slowly.
This
 has rarely impact
on
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the modern citizens’ choice of buying items. Given
second
 way is familiar with my father’s generation before
internet
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the internet
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 is widely used. At that time, advertisements and comments on some
products
 like vehicles and cosmetics from TV, radio, and magazines offered trustful sources.
For example
, my father traded some stocks while reading
an
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economic
megazines
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magazines
magazine
 in
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the 1990’s
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1990’s
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.
However
, since computer technology has been developed, my father doesn’t depend on the paper contents but search for reviews of analysis or other
investers
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investors
 from a massive number of
web sites
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websites
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 that have more than 10 million membership and shows the public opinion on the
products
.
In addition
,
consumers
 can participate in
assessment
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the assessment
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 of the items, giving a part of points to the open page.
As a result
 of
this
, internet reviews achieved highly reasonable
trusts
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 from
consumers
. To conclude, the 3 ways have
the
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 strong impact on people’s decision of buying items in the order of being written. The
first
 method is the oldest and affects the smallest number of
consumers
 and the
last
 way is the latest and brings broad effect on purchasing.
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