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Some people think that all University students should study whatever they like.others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful, such as those related to science and technology.

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Different
subjects
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 are needed for different professions, it depends on the interests and the future plans of the pupil. A
lot
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 of people opines that only
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 that are useful should be chosen at universities
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for example
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 science and technology,
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contrary
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there’s
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 beliefs that one should
study
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 whatever they want in
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university
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a university
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. I agree that there’s a
lot
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 of benefits from choosing what they love in
university
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, in the following paragraphs I will explain why so.
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 no one can live your
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, only you get to live the
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 you want to.
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 choosing what you want in
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 plays a crucial part to
live
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 a successful
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.
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 studying something you have zero
interests
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 in can have a negative impact on mental health as well as on physical health.
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, having
interest
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an interest
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 in dancing but having to
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pre med
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 in
university
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, can cause a
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 of distress to the student.
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Also
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 it’s my belief that every individual is different in their own unique way so, forcing them to
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subjects
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 they have no care for can have
detrimental
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 effect on the
over all
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 grades. Some having to quit due to bad grades. Which might cause conflict within oneself
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 with the loved ones.
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Moreover
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 there are a
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 of other fields, that does not require special science
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 to have a blast of a career.
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 to be a successful football player you don’t have to
study
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 medicine in
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. To summarise, even though science and technological fields are vast and
ever changing
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ever-changing
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, just like how we pick clothes we like,
subjects
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 chosen at
university
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 should be the ones that are interesting and should be about what you are passionate about.
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