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Write about the following topic: A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc.). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#topic #government’s #role #defence #capability #infrastructure #roads #water #supplies #services #education #health #security #groups #individuals #community
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Security
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, infrastructure
development
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 and public
services
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 are important
services
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 for a
country
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. Some
people
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 believe that the
government
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 should only
faciliate
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facilitate
defense
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 and
urben
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urban
development
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 while
private
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the private
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sector
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 should provide other
services
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. In
this
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's role to provide other
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such
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 as education, health and public
security
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 other than
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apply
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infrastructure
development
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.
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private
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the private
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sector
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 plays an indispensable role in
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development
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the development
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 of a
country
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. Since the
government
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 does not have
necessary
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the necessary
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 financial capabilities to cover the entire
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 with public
services
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, private organizations provide those
services
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 in most cities.
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, many developing countries allow
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the private
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sector
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 to do investments in the
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 to build private schools, hospitals while the
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 provide
defense
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defence
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services
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 and infrastructural
development
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.
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 helps the state to reduce the cost to maintain
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services
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 as those are handling by the private
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.
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, even though providing
such
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services
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 by the private
sector
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 has many benefits to the
government
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, it is not beneficial for
people
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 as those
services
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 would not be free of charge. Whereas private groups or individuals spend their money to provide those public
services
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 to the community, it would not help for every
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 in the
country
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 because their main aim is to earn profits.
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, if the private organization handle education and health
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instead
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 of the
government
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,
then
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 not every person can afford the cost of these
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 so that only rich
people
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 would get
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these
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 benefits so that it is intuitively obvious that these should be managed by the
government
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 not private groups. Because of
this
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 reason, It elucidates the point that the
government
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 should provide all of these
services
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 and developments with help of
people
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's tax money. In summary,
security
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, urban
development
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 and public
services
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 play an indispensable role in
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development
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the development
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 of a
country
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. Some
individual
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individuals
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 believe that the
government
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 should only focus on
security
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 and
infrastruture
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infrastructure
development
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 while private sectors provide other
services
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. In
this
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essay
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 I discussed both views and explained why the
government
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 should handle all of the
development
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 and
services
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.
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