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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Every
country
 has its
traditions
 and culture that they follow. In recent times, people are interested in exploring the whole world. In
such
 cases, when they
visit
 different
countries
, they have to follow respective
culture
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 and
tradition
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accordingly
. In my opinion,
visitors
 should be welcomed by the tourist
country
 despite
of
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their local
customs
 or
traditions
 being followed. There are few
countries
 that are very sentimental about their
traditions
 and local
behaviour
 like Afghanisthan, India etc. There are
also
countries
 that do not feel particular about the
behaviour
 or
customs
 followed by the
visitors
. When people
visit
countries
 that have
stricit
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strict
traditions
 to follow, the
visitors
 should be well aware of their way of living and custom
that is
 followed in the
country
 that they are planning to
visit
. By following the tradition or custom of
respective
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country
 can be
benificial
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beneficial
 to the visitor itself. The local people may get impressed that the
visitors
 are following their
customs
 and may offer help to the
visitors
 and take good care of them . Local people‘s support is extremely important to stay in a particular
country
.
On the other hand
, there is
also
 an argument that the tourist
countries
 should be able to accept
visitors
 irrespective of their
customs
 and
behaviour
. Host
countries
 are visited by
plethora
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 of
tourists
 throughout the world. There are numerous
traditions
 followed in different parts of the world. It is not fair to expect that the
tourists
 visiting their
country
 should follow their local
customs
 and
behaviour
.
Tourists
 can enjoy their
visit
 only when they are free of rules.
Tourists
 may
also
 get terrified to
visit
the
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country
 which is strict in its local
customs
 and
behaviour
. Eventually, the tourism rate for that
country
 will drop.
Therefore
, with all the above considerations , I conclude that the
visitors
 should be welcomed with open hearts
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so that they can enjoy their trip and will be interested to revisit the
country
.
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