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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what is your opinion should be done about it.

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Regarding the current situation, job positions are highly demanded
from
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 people around the country.
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, competitive qualifications require
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experiences
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experience
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 from graduates. With limited human resources and economic conditions,
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 has affected significant numbers of talented people to be unemployed after graduation.
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 essay, it points out various factors and solutions
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 the problems.
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, employers require high qualifications and
experiences
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 from
students
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such
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 as high GPAX with more than a year of
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experiences
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experience
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 in related working fields, which they are not eligible to be qualified applicants.
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intensive theories of university curriculums that do not allow
students
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 to explore
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the real fields of works. As well,
companies
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 treat intern
students
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 as disqualified
workers
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. To clarify, executive
workers
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 in
companies
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 do not allow
students
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 during internship
session
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sessions
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 to show their talents and abilities to work For another condition, leads to employment
complication
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complications
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 is over-described qualification. Due to the present economic situation, it affects
companies
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 with limited headcount, which require more expertise than the job titles to reduce usages of human resources and deduct company salary budgets., Some skilled applicants are even ineligible to reach the requirements.
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, lower wages for qualified ones have impacted
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workers
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’ esteem values that affect mental abilities as lower abilities as the salary they receive. In my perspective, the mentioned causes above can
be solve
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 by both sides: employers and employees.
Companies
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 should treat intern
students
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 as one of their company
workers
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, with instruction from experienced
workers
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,
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 as assigning them parts of projects with senior mentors.
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,
students
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 can strengthen their portfolios during university by accrediting university courses with extra curriculums activities,
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 as joining innovation challenges, developing
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in
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class
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project
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projects
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 to publish, and exchanging programmes. To summarise,
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 circumstance is caused by the country’s fundamental structure that affects company financials management, education system, and seniority
mind-set
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. The results can
be unfold
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 by be open-minded to miscellaneous opportunities and
experiences
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 for both employers and employees.
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