In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what is your opinion should be done about it.

Regarding the current situation, job positions are highly demanded
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people around the country.
Likewise
, competitive qualifications require
experiences
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from graduates. With limited human resources and economic conditions,
this
has affected significant numbers of talented people to be unemployed after graduation.
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essay, it points out various factors and solutions
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the problems.
To begin
, employers require high qualifications and
experiences
from
students
such
as high GPAX with more than a year of
experiences
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in related working fields, which they are not eligible to be qualified applicants.
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affects
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intensive theories of university curriculums that do not allow
students
to explore
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the real fields of works. As well,
companies
treat intern
students
as disqualified
workers
. To clarify, executive
workers
in
companies
do not allow
students
during internship
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to show their talents and abilities to work For another condition, leads to employment
complication
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is over-described qualification. Due to the present economic situation, it affects
companies
with limited headcount, which require more expertise than the job titles to reduce usages of human resources and deduct company salary budgets., Some skilled applicants are even ineligible to reach the requirements.
Moreover
, lower wages for qualified ones have impacted
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workers
’ esteem values that affect mental abilities as lower abilities as the salary they receive. In my perspective, the mentioned causes above can
be solve
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by both sides: employers and employees.
Companies
should treat intern
students
as one of their company
workers
, with instruction from experienced
workers
,
such
as assigning them parts of projects with senior mentors.
In addition
,
students
can strengthen their portfolios during university by accrediting university courses with extra curriculums activities,
such
as joining innovation challenges, developing
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class
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project
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to publish, and exchanging programmes. To summarise,
this
circumstance is caused by the country’s fundamental structure that affects company financials management, education system, and seniority
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. The results can
be unfold
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by be open-minded to miscellaneous opportunities and
experiences
for both employers and employees.
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