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Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays is very common to see people changing
work
 and
company
, but
this
 statement was not always like
this
. The aim of
this
 essay is to regard all the benefits and drawbacks to stay in the same organization or to change during
the
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life
, and
finally
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 explain that
this
 choice should be made based on the possibilities of
succed
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succeed
success
 in a career.
To begin
 with, stay in the same organization could have positive points for
a
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an
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employee
.
First
 of all, is
a
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proof of capacity and loyalty to the
company
. Stay in the same organization could give more possibilities to reach
high level
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 positions at
work
.
For instance
, companies
such
 as Marriott and Coca-Cola reward employees who decide to build a career in the group.
Besides
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 that
,
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is a
synonim
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synonym
 of economic security during
the
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working
life
. Having said that, stay in the same
company
 could make an impression that the person is not able to assume challenges, and it is not open to
broke
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 the comfort zone from a stable professional
life
.
Furthermore
,
numeros
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numerous
 advantages could be mentioned related to
work
 in different organizations.
First
 of all,
work
 for plural organizations can give to the
employee
 a bigger possibility to learn multiples skills.
Moreover
,
change
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company
 can enlarge the networking of
a
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an
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employee
. To sum up, stay in the same
company
 or change
work
 have benefits and drawbacks in both cases. For that reason, I firmly believe that
this
 choice should be based on the opportunities that the
employee
 have during their
life
, independently
if
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 the person
stay
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 in the same
company
 or embrace various changes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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