The oie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy consumption of the UK in two years
The chart compares the information
of
various types of Change preposition
on
energy
consumption
in the UK in 2000 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen from the chart that coal and gas
had the largest consumption
in two years and had a similar quantity, while
petrol
was
decreased significantly from the past.
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According to
the pie charts in the UK, coal and gas
were the highest consumption
energy
with 30% and 29.5 % in 2000, followed by petrol
, solar and other, with the figure being 29%, 6.5% and 5%, respectively. Furthermore
, coal and gas
still had the largest consumption
with slightly
increased to 31% and 30% in 2010. Correct article usage
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petrol
was
dropped remarkably from 29% to 20% Unnecessary verb
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whereas
solar and other energy
were
rose Unnecessary verb
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to
6.5% to 10% and 5% to 9%.
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To conclude
, both two years are mostly consumed coal and gas
energy
followed by petrol
, solar and other.Submitted by tippayarat.5989 on
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