Air traffic is increasingly leading to more noise pollution and airport construction. One reason for this is the growth in low cost passenger flights, often to holiday destination. Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily. Do you agree or disagree?

Worldwide
air
travelling is continuously rising for business, as well as for pleasure and to fulfil
this
requirement, countries are building more airports. Many
people
have a view that
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behind soaring
air
travel
cheap
flight
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flights
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are responsible which is possible because of more airports. These airdromes are polluting the
air
and multiplying noise pollution and
government
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the government
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should control it
through
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applying hefty taxes. I do not agree with that and
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essay I will discuss
this
.
firstly
, if
air
ticket
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tickets
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will become expensive
then
people
especially
middle
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the middle
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class, will not be able to
travel
to
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for holidays.
this
will not only impact them but to tourism industry
also
.
moreover
, some countries are highly dependent on tourism so their economy will suffer.
Secondly
, it will impact
aviation
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the aviation
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industry
also
for example
because of Covid-19,
nation
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the nation
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went to lockdown and
air
travel
was stopped. during that time, many airlines declared themselves insolvent which ultimately impacts on
economy
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the economy
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.
thirdly
, with
this
approach rich
people
will only be able to
travel
and
this
can again become the cause for social discrimination. Students cannot afford high price tickets so, before applying to study abroad should have to think because they will be capable to meet their family so often. To conclude, if
people
compares
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between problems and benefits
then
air
travel
is good for economic growth which
ultimately
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is ultimately
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beneficial for everybody.
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