Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a goo measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not.
Money
has had been considered as a status symbol since hmthe
civilisation begins; but, nowadays, people perceive Correct your spelling
the
success
solely according to the exorbitant articles that someone possess
. Change the verb form
possesses
However
, there are some other factors like compassion and honesty that also
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are also
contributor
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contributors
success
.
Undoubtedly, the
wealth is extremely important to sustain in the present era. Correct article usage
apply
In other words
, a loaf of bread to eat, a shelter to live and a piece of cloths to cover bare
body are the basic demands of a human being; Correct article usage
the bare
such
necessities cannot be afforded without having money
. Thereby, the populace perceives a wealthy person as the most successful, because he has potential
and sources to own luxurious items. Correct article usage
the potential
In addition
, in most of
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underdeveloping
or developing countries, many people have been depriving of Add an article
the underdeveloping
such
basic facilities, therefore
, for people who have been facing financial predicaments, money
is the only hope that could raise their standards and automatically, they associate wealth with success
and happiness.
On the other hand
, compassion, honesty, humbleness and sympathy for needy folks also
enrich someone's success
. Indian history has had been witnessed many such
kind-hearted humans who were not rich, but their contributions to society are commemorated and has
made them alive in peoples' hearts forever. Change the verb form
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For instance
, Mothers Teresa was a social worker who had run a
NGO to help the populace who were suffering from lethal diseases like tuberculosis and leprosy. Even still today, she has been recalled with full respect by the mass for her diligent efforts for the betterment of mankind. On contrary, a drug lord who Change the article
an
possess
expensive Change the verb form
possesses
stuffs
would be criticised for his misdeeds.
To conclude Change the wording
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kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
then
, undoubtedly, money
could bring happiness and success
if it associate
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associates
only
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the only
of
life, but kindness and compassion are the characteristics that can not make someone a great person but Change preposition
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also
increase his prestige in society.Submitted by parneet.k876 on
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