Success is often measured in terms of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think wealth is a goo measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not.

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Money
has had been considered as a status symbol since
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the
civilisation begins; but, nowadays, people perceive
success
solely according to the exorbitant articles that someone
possess
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.
However
, there are some other factors like compassion and honesty that
also
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a great
contributor
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to
success
. Undoubtedly,
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wealth is extremely important to sustain in the present era.
In other words
, a loaf of bread to eat, a shelter to live and a piece of cloths to cover
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body are the basic demands of a human being;
such
necessities cannot be afforded without having
money
. Thereby, the populace perceives a wealthy person as the most successful, because he has
potential
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and sources to own luxurious items.
In addition
, in most
of
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underdeveloping
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or developing countries, many people have been depriving of
such
basic facilities,
therefore
, for people who have been facing financial predicaments,
money
is the only hope that could raise their standards and automatically, they associate wealth with
success
and happiness.
On the other hand
, compassion, honesty, humbleness and sympathy for needy folks
also
enrich someone's
success
. Indian history has had been witnessed many
such
kind-hearted humans who were not rich, but their contributions to society are commemorated and
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made them alive in peoples' hearts forever.
For instance
, Mothers Teresa was a social worker who had run
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NGO to help the populace who were suffering from lethal diseases like tuberculosis and leprosy. Even still today, she has been recalled with full respect by the mass for her diligent efforts for the betterment of mankind. On contrary, a drug lord who
possess
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expensive
stuffs
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would be criticised for his misdeeds. To conclude
then
, undoubtedly,
money
could bring happiness and
success
if it
associate
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only
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comfort
of
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life, but kindness and compassion are the characteristics that can not make someone a great person but
also
increase his prestige in society.
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