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Meat production requires relatively more land than crop production. Some people think that as land is becoming scarce, the world’s meat consumption should be reduced. What measures could be taken to reduce the world’s meat consumption? What kinds of problem such measures cause?

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In present-day,
the
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 more and more lands are used for providing
meat
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 production.And it comes to thE result that not enough land for
everthing
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everything
 so we have to control
this
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 rate or better reduce it. And we have to make
a long term solutions
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long term solutions
a long term solution
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 to solve
this
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 problem. And I will show two measures
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First
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measures
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measure
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 is the actual hard one: to encourage everyone to eat more crop production,or to be vegetarian. Making people more interesting
about to
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 being a vegetarian or vegan; add some side benefits like decrease the price of
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and increase the price of
meat
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 products will make some changes. But many people find
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 measure difficult and need a long time to be effective The
second
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 measure is
eat
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to eat
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 something like
meat
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 products but not from
meat
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, like some kind of mushroom and artificial
meat
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. But it tastes not really good and
may be
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maybe
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 don’t have enough
nutrion
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nutrition
 likE
meat
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 products In conclusion , it
hard
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is hard
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 to reduce
meat
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comsumptions
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consumption
consumptions
, we have to change in our mind , learn more about diet or make more things can interested us more than
meat
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. But I believe someday it will be done
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