The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.

The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.
The charts show the percentage of
water
use
in Australia in 2004, in terms of the type of consumer and how the
water
was used in residential areas.
Overall
, it can be seen that the large majority of
water
use
in Australia was in the residential sector, and the biggest
uses
Fix the agreement mistake
use
show examples
of that
water
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
in bathrooms and gardens. In 2004, 70% of all
water
use
in Australia was in the residential sector, with 50% used in houses and 20% used in apartments. Industrial
use
and businesses accounted for 11% and 10% of the
overall
water
use
,
while
the government and other uses made up 6% and 3% respectively. A large portion of the
water
that was used in residential areas was consumed in bathrooms and gardens, at 27% and 28% respectively. The
water
that was used to wash clothes accounted for 20%,
while
toilets and kitchens consumed 15% and 10% of the total residential
water
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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