The pie and bar charts below show the percentage of water consumption and use in Australia in 2004.
The charts show the percentage of
water
use
in Australia in 2004, in terms of the type of consumer and how the water
was used in residential areas.
Overall
, it can be seen that the large majority of water
use
in Australia was in the residential sector, and the biggest uses
of that Fix the agreement mistake
use
water
was
in bathrooms and gardens.
In 2004, 70% of all Change the verb form
were
water
use
in Australia was in the residential sector, with 50% used in houses and 20% used in apartments. Industrial use
and businesses accounted for 11% and 10% of the overall
water
use
, while
the government and other uses made up 6% and 3% respectively.
A large portion of the water
that was used in residential areas was consumed in bathrooms and gardens, at 27% and 28% respectively. The water
that was used to wash clothes accounted for 20%, while
toilets and kitchens consumed 15% and 10% of the total residential water
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