Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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to the Development-Related Postgraduate Courses (EPOS)
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, I have looked for one within the
energy
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sector, the area where I started my career. The renewable
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industry fascinated me for two reasons,
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is the fact to contribute to a sustainable world. And
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, the potential growth to be explored in Brazil. The three top
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that I have identified with my study purpose and professional goals are: 1.Postgraduate Programme Renewable
Energy
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– PPRE Universität
Oldenburg
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2.Renewable
Energy
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Management
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(REM) Technische Hochschule Köln 3.Master of Engineering in “
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and Environmental
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in Developing Countries” (
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formerly
former
SESAM) Europa-Universität Flensburg I have chosen REM at TH Köln as my first choice. I am very excited
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the
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because
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management
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and leadership skills. The modules are well divided between theory, practice and of
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, the thesis. I believe that
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will result in an interesting combination that can provide interdisciplinary experiences and
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an international atmosphere.
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, I have had the chance to visit Köln a few times during my exchange
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year, and I would be happy to live there
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the welcoming environment and possibilities offered. My second selection, I would be glad to join the PPRE at
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. I first heard about that
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as a recommendation from friends from
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energy
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field who have studied at
Oldenburg
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University
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and had strongly recommended it as a
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to learn deeply the concepts and engineering behind renewable
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. The
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provides not only professional opportunities
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encourages a research path.
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is a nice city to live and I could take advantage of my contacts located there to support and integrate me into the community. As the third option, I have selected SESAM at Flensburg
University
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. The
course
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presents strong fundaments of important principles
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economics, project
management
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and engineering. I have concluded an MBA in Project
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and I am passionate about the theme, so I am convinced that the
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shapes a complete professional. The
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offers the possibility of
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field research abroad, which is an amazing opportunity to apply the gained knowledge into practice.
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an active international community, because of the location by the border and
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the foreign students who looked after an acknowledged
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a scholarship to any of my selected courses. I am sure that all options are outstanding institutions just by being part of the Development-Related Postgraduate Courses (EPOS)
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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