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Some people think employers should not care about the way their employees dress, but the quality at work. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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The vast majority of people believe that companies should not care about their employee
dress
 code but they must be concerned about
quality
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 of
work
 that has been done.
This
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such
 a viewpoint and
firstly
 it will discuss a change in
professional
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 environment and
secondly
, we have to admit that sometimes
dress
code
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 should exist for a good reason in certain professions. As far as I can see, many companies have stopped telling their employees the way that they are should be dressed. I believe, that
it
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a
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very important decision because have a high impact on the
work
 atmosphere.
For instance
, there are several huge international companies
such
 as Facebook and Google that have an informal
work
 environment,
nevertheless
, the quality of
work
 is always outstanding. It is evident, that performance did not affect by the
dress
 code.
However
, I firmly believe that some
occupation
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 should have a formal style of
dress
 because it is an important part of people’s perception. Particular emphasis should be paid to particular professions
such
 as nurses, police officers. These uniforms may have a practical or safety function and help to identify different types of workers.
Similarly
, a lawyer, politician or school may choose to wear
formal
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dress
 because they are representing authorities and most people prefer to see them in
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formal attire. To conclude, I tend to believe that for years
work
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 environment has been changed and employees should decide which
dress
 they can wear to the
work
 by themselves,
nonetheless
, it is highly important for some professionals to have a different uniform.
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